True honesty is one of the hardest things to come by now-a-days; someone who is not afraid to speak their mind, no matter the consequences, and is loyal to themselves and those important to them. That’s why Erin Bosse is one of the most admirable people I know.
For most people it’s difficult to directly face conflict, trying to avoid it at all costs. Majority of high school students are indifferent to the events that happen between them and other peers throughout the school. Not Erin, however. Majority of high school students, when informed that people are talking behind their backs, will disregard it and feign ignorance in front of that person. Not Erin, however.
Erin Bosse goes to Somers high school, a school much bigger than North Salem and therefore prone to more cliques, rumors, and gossip. The girls who attend Somers are often aggressive, while the boys are even more hostile and violent. In a school where everyone talks about anyone, gossip rules the hallways, and trash talking is most prevalent, Erin remains respected and well liked.
I remember one situation in particular when I was taken aback by this noteworthy quality. A “friend” of Erin’s had made a nasty comment to me regarding Erin’s fidelity, and I shared the comment with her, expecting her to complain and vent to me, but no one else. What I did not expect was Erin to confront the girl in school the next day when the two passed in the hallway. She criticized the girl for talking behind a friend’s back; in many high schoolers minds, the worst possible thing. She also commented on the irony of the situation, a “friend” insulting another friend’s loyalty. The two girls, still to this day, have not spoken. Many times has the girl tried to apologize, but to dear ears. With Erin, one strike and you’re out. No second chances.
This trait is one of the most admirable that exists among few people. Not to be cliché, but Ms. Bosse stays true to herself at all costs, keeping her close friends close and ignoring those who don’t matter. If she has a problem with somebody, that person is the first to hear about it. And from Erin as well, not through the grapevine. This is one of the most admirable qualities, I believe. To know who is true to you, and to act upon those who are not.
For most people it’s difficult to directly face conflict, trying to avoid it at all costs. Majority of high school students are indifferent to the events that happen between them and other peers throughout the school. Not Erin, however. Majority of high school students, when informed that people are talking behind their backs, will disregard it and feign ignorance in front of that person. Not Erin, however.
Erin Bosse goes to Somers high school, a school much bigger than North Salem and therefore prone to more cliques, rumors, and gossip. The girls who attend Somers are often aggressive, while the boys are even more hostile and violent. In a school where everyone talks about anyone, gossip rules the hallways, and trash talking is most prevalent, Erin remains respected and well liked.
I remember one situation in particular when I was taken aback by this noteworthy quality. A “friend” of Erin’s had made a nasty comment to me regarding Erin’s fidelity, and I shared the comment with her, expecting her to complain and vent to me, but no one else. What I did not expect was Erin to confront the girl in school the next day when the two passed in the hallway. She criticized the girl for talking behind a friend’s back; in many high schoolers minds, the worst possible thing. She also commented on the irony of the situation, a “friend” insulting another friend’s loyalty. The two girls, still to this day, have not spoken. Many times has the girl tried to apologize, but to dear ears. With Erin, one strike and you’re out. No second chances.
This trait is one of the most admirable that exists among few people. Not to be cliché, but Ms. Bosse stays true to herself at all costs, keeping her close friends close and ignoring those who don’t matter. If she has a problem with somebody, that person is the first to hear about it. And from Erin as well, not through the grapevine. This is one of the most admirable qualities, I believe. To know who is true to you, and to act upon those who are not.
1 comment:
Well written Erik!. Be sure to share this with Erin. I like your use of repetition, and you show particular command of language and structure early in the essay.
In terms of constructive criticism, I think the second half could be tightened up a bit. Try to move more quickly through your example and avoid redundancy in your conclusion.
Overall, a well written piece!
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